Last day

Last day

English 75 Summer 2011 Last Day

H/I “Second Chance” Draft?

Essays must include my comments

H/I bonus points.

Essays back with a few comments about high scores and about why we do it.

Complete Feedback.

Return of Essays, etc

Starting next Thursday, ask Kelley in English Department.

Grades due this Thursday, posted online under schedule that day

My schedule

Fall: English 101x2 and Creative Writing.  Here’s what we’re reading.

Winter 102x2:  Here's what we're reading.

Spring 95 x2 and Student Literary Journal, I think

You schedule should include English 85.  It’s a tutor at the writing center you meet with between 1-3 times a week.  Every writer should take this class with their 101 and 102 classes.  It’s an incredible resource and will help you get through two hard classes.

Also, you can ask about anything anytime.

You can say hi to me on campus. Say your name and I'll say mine.

You can say hi to each other.

The abrecaminos sculpture in this building.

What the research says.

or

As you walk, you cut open and create that riverbed into which the stream of your descendants shall enter and flow." --Nikos Kanzantzakis

And now:

Day 26

English 75 Summer 2011 Day 26

1. Second Chance Essays due Tuesday—you can do the math to figure out if this means you.
2. Final Bonus Point Opportunities—each are worth 5 BP.
1. Quotation Marks 582-589—Practice 1-4, Chapter Review and Chapter Test.
2. Verb Tense 380-402: Practice 1-12, Chapter Review and Chapter Test.
3. Hand in final draft of your third essay.
1. O/R Y/N?

                                                              i.      Y= +3

                                                            ii.      N= +/- O

                                                          iii.      Y= Read one of your chapters.

                                                           iv.      N= Listen to everyone.

Day 25

English 75 Summer 2011 Day 25

1. Bonus Points for Blog due.  Names and number of posts, please.
2. Third Essay Assignment Final Draft due August 8^th—Monday
3. Second Chance Essays due Tuesday—you can do the math to figure out if this means you.
4. Narrative Rubric point spread.
5. Peer Editing
1. In groups of four.
2. Trade essay with someone at your table.
3. Read silently, mark as you go.
4. Complete Peer Review worksheet.
5. Discuss essays together.
6. Trade with different person at your table.
7. Third?
6. Hand in rough draft.

List of Novels by Point of View

http://wikibin.org/articles/list-of-novels-by-point-of-view.html

Day 24

English 75 Summer 2011 Day 24

1. Bonus Points for Blog due Thursday.  You can go back to start of TKR only.
2. Third Essay Assignment (Rough Draft due Thursday, Final Draft due August 8^th)
3. Dialogue Checklist.

Setting

"If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

–Anton Chekhov 

1.      Time & Place (physical environment)

2.      TKR

For example: Greasy Lake, The Storm,  

Exercise:

• Write about the time: (five minutes)

§  you watched light settle on the water

§  you saw the first smudge of dawn

§  you woke before the others

• Write about something from memory that seems lit by a particular kind of light.  (from Grapes of Wrath, Steinbeck)
• There was this one tree.

5 w’s

Senses/Imagery

Point of View

Narrator: 

A voice or character, the one from whose perspective the story is told

First Person:  A story in which the narrator is a participant in the action.  Refers to him/herself as “I”.

Unreliable:  events are related in a subjective or distorted manner by a person who is deceptive, self-deceptive, deluded or deranged.

Stream of consciousness: the procession of thoughts passing through the mind.  Not logical, but mingled randomly.  Mostly a modern technique.

Third Person:  A type of narration in which the narrator is a nonparticipant. Characters are referred to as “he,” “she,” or “they.”

All-knowing/Omniscient:  A type of pov in which the narrator knows everything about all of the characters and events in a story.  Moves freely in time and space.  Generally third person.

Limited Omniscient:  Sees into the minds of some but not all of the characters.

Objective:  Reports dialogue and action with minimal interpretation or access to the characters’ minds.  Like a fly on a wall.

Point of view continued

1. First Person

1.       Single character's point of view.

2. Advantages of First Person

                                                               i.      maintain naivete or innocence

                                                             ii.      Narrated out loud.

                                                           iii.      Irony of narrator/Humor

1.       Also, unreliable/biased narrators

                                                           iv.      Immediacy?

                                                             v.      Disadvantages

1.       Less flexible

2.       Can be contrived

3. Third person

                                                               i.      Better for "hot" material.

                                                             ii.      Flexible.

                                                           iii.      Omniscient/Limited (All characters v Single character)

                                                           iv.      Objective/Subjective: (No thoughts or feelings v. Thoughts and Feelings)

                                                             v.      Disadvantages

a.       "Head hopping"=confusion unless handled right

Dialogue

NOT SAFE FOR WORK (or young children).
Click at your own risk.

(rethought posting the f-bomb scene--you can google it if you're interested)
Here's Snoop.

Here's Clerks

Pulp Fiction

Spinal Tap

Day 23

English 75 Summer 2011 Day 23

1. Bonus Points for Blog due Thursday.  You can go back to start of TKR only.
2. Narration Bonus Points?
3. Progress on Essay 2: 9 to go.
4. Third Essay Assignment (Rough Draft due Thursday, Final Draft due August 8^th)
1. Vonnegut on good stories.
2. Overall structure:  Three Chapters (Separation, Initiation, Return/Arrival)
5. A note about when I’ll talk to you:  Three Things
6. Dialogue Checklist.

Tips on Dialogue

In two's: I'm sorry but…

1.       The first writer pulls out a piece of paper and begins their dialogue with the words "I'm sorry, but…". They complete the sentence and pass the journal to their partner.

2.       The partner, after reading the sentence, writes a line (or paragraph) of dialogue which heightens the tension.

3.       Keep passing the journal back and forth, trying to throw curve balls at one another without delving into the absurd.

4.       Try not to rely on dialogue tags to reveal how the character is speaking.

5.       In fact, don't use dialogue tags at all. Rely on your word choice and punctuation.

Movies with great dialogue: Tarantino, Juno, Linklater, Kevin Smith, Coen Brothers, David Mamet, Casablanca, China Town, Aaron Sorkin, The Wire (David Simon), Deadwood, Sopranos.

Listen to how people talk to each other

·         Most of it is the weather.

·         He's like a bull in a china shop…

·         Eating out. Bars. Waiting rooms. Cell phone jerks. At the checkout.

Right now: Field work

·         Hub. (x6)

·         Deccio. (x3)

·         Lobby/office lobby downstairs. (x4)

·         Lobby upstairs/office lobby. (x4)

·         Library (x3)

·         Outside. (x2)

Come back in 15 minutes with dialogue.

Find a line or two.

More notes on dialogue:

Dialogue is not real speech, but it should sound like it.

·         Cut words and phrases that don't move things along

Don't use dialogue to provide exposition—keep it to three sentences or less

Break it up with action—remind us they are physical

Vary signal phrases, but keep it simple. Don't use elaborate signal phrases (she expostulated, he interjected)

Avoid stereotypes in dialect, but…

·         Huck Finn

·         To Kill a Mockingbird

Don't over use slang/profanity. "Slang goes sour in a short time." --EH

Read a lot. Note good/bad

Punctuate correctly

·         Use quotation marks?

Start a new paragraph when changing speakers.

Setting

"If you say in the first chapter that there is a rifle hanging on the wall, in the second or third chapter it absolutely must go off. If it's not going to be fired, it shouldn't be hanging there."

–Anton Chekhov 

1.       Time & Place (physical environment)

2.       TKR

For example: Greasy Lake, The Storm,  

Exercise:

• Write about the time: (five minutes)

§  you watched light settle on the water

§  you saw the first smudge of dawn

§  you woke before the others

• Write about something from memory that seems lit by a particular kind of light.  (from Grapes of Wrath, Steinbeck)
• There was this one tree.

5 w’s

Senses/Imagery

1. Real Writing:  Narration--if there's time.
1. Read 129-131; 132-134.
2. Read 136-137
3. Chapter Review

Day 22

English 75 Summer 2011 Day 22

1. Bonus Points for Blog due Thursday. You can go back to start of TKR only.

2. Hand Back Essay 2: 7am class.

a. Some quick notes on scores.
b. Questions about handwriting.

3. Third Essay Assignment (Rough Draft due Thursday, Final Draft due August 8th)

Vonnegut on good stories.

b. Overall structure: Three Chapters (Separation, Initiation, Return/Arrival)

c. Characters

i. Read

iii. Exercise—the kind of person who…(did we do this in 7am class?)

iv. Exercise—Naming your characters.

d. Characters, part two

i. Hero

ii. Helpers, Mentors?

1. Grapes of Wrath, The Kite Runner

2. Five minutes on one of your main characters.

4. Real Writing: Narration

a. 121-123: Read.

b. Practice 1: What is the main point of your story?
i. How does your main character change? From what to what?
ii. What do they learn?

c. Read 125-126.

i. Try this with Separation, Initiation, Return—major events.

d. Read 129-131; 132-134.

e. Read 136-137

f. Chapter Review

5. Dialogue Checklist.

a. Exercises if there’s time

Dialogue

Short
Vivid
Believable

Dialogue Exercises:

In two's: I'm sorry but…
1. The first writer pulls out a piece of paper and begins their dialogue with the words "I'm sorry, but…". They complete the sentence and pass the journal to their partner.
2. The partner, after reading the sentence, writes a line (or paragraph) of dialogue which heightens the tension.
3. Keep passing the journal back and forth, trying to throw curve balls at one another without delving into the absurd.

4. Try not to rely on dialogue tags to reveal how the character is speaking.

Movies with great dialogue: Tarantino, Juno, Linklater, Kevin Smith, Coen Brothers, David Mamet, Casablanca, China Town, Aaron Sorkin

Listen to how people talk to each other

• Most of it is the weather.
• He's like a bull in a china shop…
• Eating out. Bars. Waiting rooms. Cell phone jerks. At the checkout.

6. Bonus points: Readings for Writers: Chapter 42, Narration—Due Monday. (+5 BP)  I'll take these TUESDAY for either class.
a. Read 613-621
b. For each reading (there are two), do
i. Summarize and respond
ii. Check your comprehension
iii. Read Critically

On Writing Short Stories

Day 21

English 75 Summer 2011 Day 21

1. Hand in Essay 2
1. O/R?

                                                               i.      Y=Intro and Conclusion=+3

                                                             ii.      N=No reading=+/-0

2. Essays back in about a week.
3. By next Thursday at the latest, which would give you the weekend to revise if this is the paper you choose to resubmit. (“Second Chance” essays due August 9^th)
1. Third Essay Assignment (Rough Draft due in a week, Final Draft due August 8^th)
1. Vonnegut on good stories.
2. Narrative rubric
3. Overall structure

                                                              i.      Known world/Departure/The Call/Separation

1.       Helpers?  Guardians?

                                                            ii.      The Unknown/Initiation/Journey

1.       Challenges and Temptations

2.       Abyss

3.       Revelation

                                                          iii.      Arrival

1.       Atonement

2.       Return with Gift

4. Checklist on structure.
5. Handout on structure—beginning and endings.
6. Characters

                                                               i.      Read

                                                             ii.      Checklist

                                                            iii.      Exercise—the kind of person who…

                                                           iv.      Exercise—How well do you know your characters?

                                                             v.      Exercise—Naming your characters.

3. Bonus points: Readings for Writers: Chapter 42, Narration—Due Monday. (+5 BP)
1. Read 613-621
2. For each reading (there are two), do

                                                               i.      Summarize and respond

                                                             ii.      Check your comprehension

                                                            iii.      Read Critically